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I loved the ending. Very nice. There are so many new poets posting in the forum who have the build up, have the build up, and surprise, they get it! And then there's this one. Build up, build up, buildupbuildup-- crash. I like the lowercase at the end, because of the mood it puts across. Also think the caps are fine, puts a strong, clear emphasis on the word. And it's poetry. You can do that with poetry, where you can't (or shouldn't) do it with other forms of writing. Don't see how you can improve on it, though I'm sure you can. I think it's great as is, but also know that there's no such thing as perfect. Do with it what you will, but it's pretty darn great as it is.
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